The Land Of Fairies
I was reading the newspaper that morning, and I took a sip of coffee. It states: tragic fire happening on Blue Fairy main street. I was shocked, such a terrible thing to happen.
As I was taking a flight down the Blue Fairy main street, I noticed a few fire fighters bumbling all over the place like bees, but no fire. I heard people whispering everywhere too. I was to curious so I came up to one of the fairies and asked her what happened, she whispered to me;
" Don't look back."
So when I did, in a blink of an eye, I saw flames coming out of the building.
Hey, I love your story! Though at the end when the fairy saw the building on fire. I thought they already put out the fire, so when you looked behind you was there another one starting? Great story though!
ReplyDeleteReally good story the details are good and I like the ending.
ReplyDeleteI don't get the ending can't really figure out what's going to happen. But I still like your story's beginning it can really help me see how casual it seems.
ReplyDeleteI really like the line "I noticed a few fire fighters bumbling all over the place like bees" as it allows the reader to imagine the scene you describe and adds to the fluency of your story. I notice many of your sentences begin with "I", next time work on using a variety of sentence starters.
ReplyDeleteYour story is pretty good, but didn't you already know there was a fire?
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