The Super Show
"I'm your host Jennifer, and today you are watching The Super Show!"
"To start us off, our next marvelous winner is..... Michele! Come on up Michele!"
"When I was little, I used to put on a blanket and imagine that I could fly," As she kept talking, two guys brought out mechanical wings, they put it on her and she started rising a few feet above the ground.
"Thank you for letting my dream come true!" She squeaked fluttering away like a butterfly.
"I guess that is it for today folks, and always keep in mind, each one of you is a superhero, even if you are a normal person."
Wow! A game show! Never would have thought of that. Though you said Thankyou, It's actually two words Thank you. I lives how you added in a dream or wish of someone else's, It's something we can all relate to! Great job!
ReplyDeleteYour story was pretty good, good job! But when you said ``when I was smaller...`` I think you could change that to ``when I was little`` cause when you say, smaller, then it sounds like your saying, when you were tiny.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Rainbow Sunshine. Its sorta confusing when you say 'Our next outgoing superhero is..... Michele'
ReplyDeleteAny ways great job!
Nice job giving a moral to the story. I get kinda confused about the next outgoing superhero.
ReplyDeleteA very creative and original idea for this weeks prompt. I see that you used some of the feedback given to you by your peers. I am too confused about the "outgoing winner". What do you mean by outgoing? Good job with your concluding line and wrapping up the message of your story.
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