The Lock In
At the last minute, I grabbed what my hands could hold and headed toward the cashier. As I joined the queue leading to the cashier, suddenly a thought popped in my head.I forgot to get my mom a Christmas gift.
So I turned around and ran toward the Christmas section, there were so many fascinating gifts.Man, the time was running out though, so I quickly grabbed a box of chocolates. While I was doing that, the bright lights turned to pitch black and the air conditioners were silent. No one was in the store except me. By now I realized that I will be missing Christmas.
I think your story is pretty cool, and interesting. And i like how you used a powerful word like "fascinating." GOOD JOB!
ReplyDeleteI think your story is pretty cool, and interesting. And i like how you used a powerful word like "fascinating." GOOD JOB!
ReplyDeleteGreat bold words they really stand out. It doesn't really flow at the start.
ReplyDeleteGood story after a period u need a space
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